Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic 2

Hátt, én sem vagyok túl jó de néhány hibát észrevettem:

Telos’s surface was destroyed by the Sith. So I thougth, it should be more tragical. Because of the war and the pollution the sky has changed into red.
Later I would like to make more transformation on Telos.

Install: Just drop the files into your Override folder.

Unistall: Delete the files from the Override folder.

Man literally too angry to die

Kotor 2-höz készítettem egy módot, amit beszándékozok küldeni kotor2files.com-nak. De mivel annyira még nem vok profi angolból, és nem akarok leégni

Nyelvtanilag, és formailag helyes a következő leirás?

Knights of the Old Republic II

Description:

Telos’s surface was destroyed by the Sith. So I thinked, it should more tragical. Because of many kills the sky has changed into red.
Later I would like to make more transformation on Telos.

Install: Just drop the files into your Override folder.

Unistall: Delete the files from the Override folder.

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